Pulling for Fixing (SL)
Friday, 13 March 2026 18:25![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
mint_phalanxI pulled The Murder After and The Year After from sale to create second editions of them. I want to fix the problems I noticed. If I don't, I'll be embarrassed by them for the rest of my life. I did not do a good job.
First, I'll change the narration from the British dialect to the American dialect. If it's confusing to that Creative Writing student, it's going to be confusing to others (even the British.) Terrance doesn't use it, anyway. It's just a relic from when the reader was supposed to be him. The British dialect was me narrating. The second person perspective is not changing because it's natural to Terrance. (He is interacting but is also watching himself.)
Then, I'll indicate when a facet called Also Terrance is speaking. He is the reason Terrance has thoughts 90% of the time, and he has conversations. This plurality manifests itself in a second person perspective. Terrance calls him "watching thoughts." (And this is what happens when you don't know your character turned muse is plural before finishing a story.)
And then, I'll remove the first chapter of The Year After from The Murder After because I don't think it will make people want to read it. Maybe I'll add my preview instead. (The preview is an excerpt of a story we share on DeviantArt and Tumblr.)
It was hard for me to admit to myself that I did a poor job with these stories. I hope I do better, so I'm embarrassed. One day, people will buy our books, and I want them to be good.
First, I'll change the narration from the British dialect to the American dialect. If it's confusing to that Creative Writing student, it's going to be confusing to others (even the British.) Terrance doesn't use it, anyway. It's just a relic from when the reader was supposed to be him. The British dialect was me narrating. The second person perspective is not changing because it's natural to Terrance. (He is interacting but is also watching himself.)
Then, I'll indicate when a facet called Also Terrance is speaking. He is the reason Terrance has thoughts 90% of the time, and he has conversations. This plurality manifests itself in a second person perspective. Terrance calls him "watching thoughts." (And this is what happens when you don't know your character turned muse is plural before finishing a story.)
And then, I'll remove the first chapter of The Year After from The Murder After because I don't think it will make people want to read it. Maybe I'll add my preview instead. (The preview is an excerpt of a story we share on DeviantArt and Tumblr.)
It was hard for me to admit to myself that I did a poor job with these stories. I hope I do better, so I'm embarrassed. One day, people will buy our books, and I want them to be good.
